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Floyd and the G-men

 
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PostPosted: Wed Feb 14, 2007 9:41 pm    Post subject: Floyd and the G-men Reply with quote

This shall be written in SECCOND PERSON! HOLY CENSORING SHIP!
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Okay. Hi there. The less you know about me the better.

I know a guy who knows a guy who knows yet anouther guy that there is this guy called Floyd.

Now, The Guy's sister who is a rainbow squirt baked cookies. A robot who ate the cookie (WTF?) wanted me to know that he is a Now Un-employed security mall gaurd. Oddly enough, The mall that he used to be the gaurd of is now burnt down. They say that this Milkman did it, And now Floyd is searching for him...

Now, If you dont mind, I would like to tell a bit more about this milkman. I heard from a freind who knows a freind who is a dirty liar who knows a girl who knows this blue.... Thing that likes cookies who knows this norn with one real eye and one odd robotic eye who knows a freind who is a liar. He says the milkman delivers milk. I am no expert on this so I will ask you to go contact Floyd. But you will have to be blindfolded while I bring you there.
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-Floyd is staring at a chalkboard that has many writings and pictures on it. He is rubbing his chin- Hello. I have been waiting for you. I must ask you... Do you have any Bugs or cameras planted on you? Who am I kidding? OF COURSE YOU DO!

Now I have reason to belive that because the sky rains cows on rare occasions, The milkman delivers milk. He is being chased by the G-men, Who are after me too. I heard his milk is delicous. And everyone wants it. I think... No... I know he is working with thoose Rainbow squrits. There are theese three rainbow Squirts that cross my mind. Theres this one called Sally, Anoutehr one called Sarah, And a tomboy called Iva. Iva wants to join the Black Hearts, Or so I heard.

Now, About the G-men. I am trusting you with alot of information because I do not think you were sent in here by them.... Wait! Thats not right! Thats not Right at all! -Makes a few marks on the chalkboard-

Thats better. Theres this place called Earth, Of where theese guys who are usually called the FBI are. They made theese special robots called G-Men, Based on both themselfs and this one stalker guy who talks funny called G-Man.

They are built with this Insanity-Cloak, Which works on anyone who considers themself insane. What it does is that as long as they are holding some kind of tool... Lets say.... A Stop sign, He will look exacly like a road crew worker. I have no clue on how to get past it.

Well.. GO ALRADY!
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I will now give some spoilers!
[size=1]999999999 out of 100000000 G-men have a broken Insanity-Cloak. As long as you are holding this stop sign, You will look like a road crew worker, and you should be able to sneak past any of them that are working on the road.[\size]

Be advised, One may also find them as telephone workers, Who work on the phone (Wow, I could never figure out what they worked on *Sarcasem*) For security reasons, Thoose will only allow in other phone crew workers.

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PostPosted: Thu Feb 15, 2007 4:44 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Actually, you speak in first person. To speak in second person, you would do something like this:
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You look at your hands, covered in metal. You know the scientist that created you made you for a special purpose. but what?




As for the G Man: tell Gordon Freeman that it's time to rise - and - shine ..... time to wake up- and....smell the ashes.

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PostPosted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 3:43 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I think it might actually be another format of second person, where the main chracter is being described by someone else. I've only actually seen the technique used once before but apparently its also called second person.

Although in this case I'm a little inclear on who is saying what and who the main character(s) are. Psyconaut8 it would be helpful if you could clear that one up a bit.

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PostPosted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 7:43 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Danikat wrote:
I think it might actually be another format of second person, where the main chracter is being described by someone else. I've only actually seen the technique used once before but apparently its also called second person.

Although in this case I'm a little inclear on who is saying what and who the main character(s) are. Psyconaut8 it would be helpful if you could clear that one up a bit.


Help who? Who are you? Are you left handed? Why did you punch that little girl? Who is the milkman? Do you know the milkman?

Simply put, Floyd is a paranoid ex-policegaurd. The Milkman is (actually floyd.... Somehow he got split in two) the man who delivers the milk and being hunted by the G-men.

There is this group called the Rainbow squirts that is trying to protect the milkman is a bunch of preeschoolers.

And then the Black hearts are very small preshool anarchists. Nuf said there.

I forgot to mention that the G-men have a hinge-like jaw and it can open up,revealing a tommy gun that is modified to be compatable with standerd infantry ammo.

By the way... Try reading between the lines... And if that doesnt work... DO SOMETHING!



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PostPosted: Sat Feb 17, 2007 4:02 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Interesting.

Sounds like you've got your own little RP going already. Smile

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PostPosted: Sat Feb 17, 2007 5:53 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I have decided to post any more characters I make here.

BTW, I forgot 2 more things about the gmen. They have countermesures from fire and they have infa-red goggles. And yes, I know, I am totally copying psyconauts. If ANY of you blame me of plagerisem, You must blame Addman for even MORE plagerisem against Cookie monster and Goron for copying the name of thoose rock creatures that are the pawns of thoose freakish fish people who have signed a secret pact with midna during the events of the orcania of time.



Name:
Broderick Lee

Age: 13

Gender: Male

Species: Human

Description and Physiology: I dont know what to put here.... Uh... Human with psyic abilites?

Physical Abilities: Not much here. He has a almost althletic build, and knows a decent amount of kung-fu. Mostly rapid kicks and punches

Supernatural Abilities: He can shoot psychic bullets from his mind via concentrating agression energys, these, however are weak in power, and require very little energy or concentration, and have to be directed by actually focusing on the target in question.

He can also cause psychic blasts from his mind. This is generally a non-specific target ability that will cause dizzyness and confusion in those with no telepathic defense. This takes up a lot of energy, and no matter what he's doing, he has to stop in order to focus the energy. This is a draining attack, and leaves him unable to use most of his other abilities for a short while, whilst he recovers.

He can use his telepathy in order to read peoples minds, but this takes up so much energy, he is left defenseless and prone to attack when using this ability as he has to shut everything else out of his mind. It requires a lot of energy and has a larger recharge time.
With his telepathy, he has minor control over animals, such as rabbits, frogs, Counterstrike players, Hitler, dogs and such like, and get them to do his bidding. This doesn't take a lot of effort.

As a clairvoyant, he can see hrough other peoples eyes, either ally or enemy, providing they have no telepathic defense or have allowed him access to their mind. To best use this ability, he has to be working with someone, who's allowed him access, thus quickening their joint decisions, ideas and actions. Against an enemy, he would be considerably slower at moving, and be more prone to an attack from an enemy, as this would require a huge amount of concentration.

He has limited telekinetic powers, that allow him to use small objects to his favour, even when fighting or running, or performing some other action. Anything heavier than maybe about a kilo and he's not able to shift it. The lighter the object, the less energy he needs to use, and the more freedom he has with that object.

He has a psychic shield, allowing him limited defense from other psychics nd potentially even less defense from telepaths. But the more he trains, the stronger this shield gets, keeping his mind safe.

He can place thoughts into peoples heads, making them forget, or beleive that he is not there, a great ability for stealth and escape. However, if people are looking close enough, they can find him, especially if they are definately searching for him in particular and know what he looks like.

I need to point out that it is a struggle to use more than one of these powers at the smae time, it would possibly cause him to fall unconcious, if not cause serious irrperable damage.

Weapondry: He preffers to just use his mind. He never fired a gun before or swung a sword.d

Equipment:
A backpack of infinite holding on his back. How it works is a mystery to modern and future science, But if it can be picked up, It can easily fit in there. Also, For graduating from Psyconauts University, He now has a handheld doorway called a "Psyco Portal". If thrown onto the mind of one who does not have a mental blockade for it, It allows him to litierally dive into their mind.

Home: An apartment building.

Origin: Earth. Somewhere on that blue planet that we all know and love... (By all, I am counting most aliens as an exeption...)
History:
July 1991, Was born

30 days ago: Graduated in becoming a psyconaut

10 days ago: Got an appartment here and now lives on Blackstar

Alignment:
Neutral

Personality:((Sorta dontk now what to put here))


Known Weaknesses:
((Or here))

Allies:
((Or here))



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PostPosted: Sat Feb 17, 2007 6:34 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I'm a little concerned that you've got super cool powers and no downsides. This, is what we call balancing out our abilities... I'll shjow you an exampl where you could have, you know, made yourself not so Godlike without actually being a God....

You Wrote:
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Supernatural Abilities: Psycic stuff. The ability to shoot psycic bullets\blasts out from his mind, Pyrokenisis (Being able to burn things with his mind), Clarovoience (Being able to see through someone elses eyes),Telekenisis (The ability to lift objects with his mind), "Invisibility" (Not true invisibility, But he can sheild himself in such a way that unless one concentrates hard with their mind, they cant see him), a Psycic sheild, Minor mind control (He can only control weak-minded organic beings. Like frogs, Rabbits, Counterstrike players, and hitler, Not humans (Hitler is an obvious exeption though)). He obviously has more that he does not know that much of yet.



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Supernatural Abilities: He can shoot psychic bullets from his mind, these, however are weak in power, and require very little energy or concentration, and have to be directed by actually focusing on the target in question.

He can also cause psychic blasts from his mind. This is generally a non-specific target ability that will cause dizzyness and confusion in those with no telepathic defense. This takes up a lot of energy, and no matter what he's doing, he has to stop in order to focus the energy. This is a draining attack, and leaves him unable to use most of his other abilities for a short while, whilst he recovers.

He can use his telepathy in order to read peoples minds, but this takes up so much energy, he is left defenseless and prone to attack when using this ability as he has to shut everything else out of his mind. It requires a lot of energy and has a larger recharge time.
With his telepathy, he has minor control over animals, such as rabbits, frogs and dogs and such like, and get them to do his bidding. This doesn't take a lot of effort, and he has been known to battle whilst using this ability to his own advantage.

As a clairvoyant, he can see hrough other peoples eyes, either ally or enemy, providing they have no telepathic defense or have allowed him access to their mind. To best use this ability, he has to be working with someone, who's allowed him access, thus quickening their joint decisions, ideas and actions. Against an enemy, he would be considerably slower at moving, and be more prone to an attack from an enemy, as this would require a huge amount of concentration.

He has limited telekinetic powers, that allow him to use small objects to his favour, even when fighting or running, or performing some other action. Anything heavier than maybe about a kilo and he's not able to shift it. The lighter the object, the less energy he needs to use, and the more freedom he has with that object.

He has a psychic shield, allowing him limited defense from other psychics nd potentially even less defense from telepaths. But the more he trains, the stronger this shield gets, keeping his mind safe.

He can place thoughts into peoples heads, making them forget, or beleive that he is not there, a great ability for stealth and escape. However, if people are looking close enough, they can find him, especially if they are definately searching for him in particular and know what he looks like.

I need to point out that it is a struggle to use more than one of these powers at the smae time, it would possibly cause him to fall unconcious, if not cause serious irrperable damage.


The more powers you have, the more you should limit them to a certain extent. But I think you've gone slightly overboard with these powers. Most telepaths/telekinetics focus on either human or animal telepathy. Telekinetsis does not necessarily go hand in hand with telepathy, but it can make the character more suceptable to it.

Some of the other abilites would fall under telepathy, depending on your character strength and skill level, but being a young character, his powers should be fairly weak, and in fact need training and use in order to get to a strong level, as most others do.

As you can see from my version, strength and usage has been cropped to what would be deemed as powerful, not powerful and what would require the most concetration and what might aid you in combat, escape and infiltration....

Please take my post as a guideline and not a personal attack... I'm talking from experience when it comes to cropping powers and limitng myself....

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PostPosted: Sat Feb 17, 2007 9:17 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Thank you. Thank you. Thank you. Hm, Not thanking you enough. Let me try this....



THANK YOU! HALAHLULAH!

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PostPosted: Sun Feb 18, 2007 4:38 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Incidentally don't worry about plagarism. If we did most of us would need new characters.
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PostPosted: Tue Feb 20, 2007 10:53 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Danikat wrote:
Incidentally don't worry about plagarism. If we did most of us would need new characters.


Thank the lord.


Name:G-009

Metabolisem: Robot

Description and Physiology: (I want to put something here, but I dont know what)

Physical Abilities: (Same as a regular G-man?)

Supernatural Abilities: (CLASSIFIED) (Undiscoverd)

Signature Moves/Attacks: (CLASSIFIED) (Undiscoverd)

Weaponry: (CLASSIFIED) (Same as a regular G-man)

Equipment: (CLASSIFIED) (Same as regular G-man)


Origin: Area ***** (All other information CLASSIFIED)

History: Now for what makes this guy diffrent. You see, Theese robotic G-men are mass produced at hidden factorys on earth and are made to patrol the universe. This one, However, Had some problems making it out. First, his serial was accidently just stamped as G-009. Then, during manufacturing, For a computer chip and AI, Somehow the machine obtained programing and gave it to the Gman labled 009. This programing contains a full Personality drive and a full Induviduality drive, Both of which were not to be released.

When first activated and sent here, He looks up at the sky. "Why me?" He thinks. "Am I created for a unique purpose? Surely I am not like thoose freaks over there that are holding road signs!" 009 sighs. "I will find my purpose here. I must! I must!"

Alignment: He wishes he knew.

Personality: Always serious. Never in the mood for a laugh. He is too busy trying to find out the secrets of the universe and whatnot to spare a good laugh.


Allies: The G-men, Only because he is one of them.

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