[The Shuriken thread] Now playing: Arc I, Beowulf

[LordPsycho]

Not that you bothered to get it, but you have premission to use any intellectual property I put into Blackstar.

[Coolpikaaa]

Feel free to use Coolpikaaa too!

-coolpikaaa

[Panther385]

SWEET MOTHER OF PETER PAUL AND MARY!

[Embri]

... ouch. That's quite a price tag. Is it really worth it, Shaon? I'm not so sure. Looks like eye candy to me. Waste of funds, pretty computers. Unless it's a Mac, of course. They're all pretty. :3

[Netdroid9]

...Is it worth the money, Embri? It's got Quad SLi. Quad SLi is what you get if you punch Jesus in the croutch, bottle up his tears and use ancient voodoo magicks known only to the greatest and most powerful demigods among us to convert them into four graphics cards which are, in and of their very existance, powerful enough to create and destroy universes.

*Plans to kill Shaon and steal the computer upon arival.*

[Cloud]

Yeah but is it really needed? If your only going to use it for a few games and such then the answer is no. If however you're constructing some awesome piece of machinery using some modelling tools then you probably need it.

For me however I think that would be a lot of overkill. Half of it would never get used.

[Shaon]

SWEET L I DID IT

SHURIKEN PAGE -1 IS IN EXISTANCE

Negitive one since it's just an intro.

Cameos by JRC!Al, JRC!Shaon, and Holloweyes + Ava.

[3kul]

Wow, HollowEyes sure looks fat I mean, I understand that he's pretty sketchy atm, but if you're going to be drawing him I'd prefer that he look a little more like he's supposed to look.

I know that it's an exceedingly old picture and that I need to draw some more pics of HollowEyes to give you a better idea of how to draw him, but use this for reference (ignore the hooves though, God only knows what I was thinking when I drew those >_>). The neck brace/collar part of the arm blades doesn't actually touch his body (yes, it's more or less floating in place), and his body's actually quite skinny (when compared to his slightly oversized head).

... Actually, don't worry about what I just said - I should probably just draw a new picture that actually shows all of these things before I go any further, rather than continue to complain about how you can't read my mind . I'll post here again once I have.

[Shaon]

Shuriken...

Is finally here!

I got my comicgenesis account approved, and shuriken is now going to be mostly Monday-Wednsday-Friday at http://blackstar.comicgenesis.com

I may shift the first arc from Kumo to Mough, though I will need 3kul's approval on HE and LS's appearences. Since you know they look different.

EDIT:

Preview for Arc 1 :3

[Panther385]

Coolness.

And I got this when I clicked the link:

FORBIDDEN

You don't have permission to access / on this server.

Additionally, a 404 Not Found error was encountered while trying to use an ErrorDocument to handle the request.


....Are those webbed feet/hands I see? o.O

[Shaon]

Yes, HE had webbed hands/feet

It's before he ate everyone and I decided he should look like a frog okay.

[Goron40]

Also getting the forbidden message.

[3kul]

IT IS FORBIDDEN! 403 Error styles for me.

Aaaaaaaaaaaaaanyways, since I now need to critique this thing... *gets out the Nit Picker to do what it does best*

SKREEEE! I have problems that require immediate clarification with the following things!

1. HollowEyes' feet are HUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUGE. Seriously, he looks like he'd kill LS if he took one step back. The funny thing is in the most recent pic of HE I pretty much scrapped his toes all together and now he has kinda tree trunk like legs (I can never draw his feet properly, and they look better that way - I'll webcam the image in asap).

2. Parasitians would not refer to Little Sister as HollowEyes' "sister" - as far as they're concerned she shouldn't exist and she isn't a person. I suppose "Eat the lesser" might be a more appropriate command, given that she's the lesser twin of the two. If I really wanted to pick into your script, I'd also add that "It's the way things have to be" is probably a better follow up to that than "You do not see this?" (I find it hard to imagine a Parasitian wording things in such a manner - they wouldn't be able to comprehend that he couldn't understand, therefore they wouldn't see any reason to ask whether or not he understood). I can't really see HollowEyes' saying "sir" to his parents either, but since I can't think of much else I guess it's ok.

3. HollowEyes has had his horn since birth, though I've never mentioned him having webbed hands or toes before (don't just go deciding things for my character as you see fit ). Webbed hands are fine (I think you did a pretty good job with his hands actually), but the feet will probably end up changing with the new pic I put up.

4. LS has had all seven of her eyes since birth, not two as you've drawn there (though some were (and still are) 'blank' (ie: no abilities associated with them)). She also seems pretty emotionless for someone who's about to be eaten, but I suppose that's because she understands the mentality and accepts it. Good job on the pic of LS, the hair looks especially nice .

5. A minor point I almost didn't notice about HE - the rings on his leg. It's actually one long swirl that curls around, not three bands. Personally I've never drawn him to be that tall either, but I've already cramped your style enough without complaining about your drawing style .

But anything that I didn't complain about deserves praise, it's a pretty good picture overall. Sorry if you feel that I've complained too much, you'll probably have better luck with other people's characters . Any reason as to why we're starting off with the birth of HollowEyes/Little Sister though?

[Shaon]

I'm actually starting off with Mough because she's fun to draw. The second arc will be Kumostory from Tsubasa's point of view.

And HE's feet are massive because of the view in this. It's actually Mough witnessing all this, and she was a quaduped at birth

I pretty much drew that page just to show how HE and LS looked but I'll alter them and rescan that pic. I'm not a big fan of 'Guardian's (the parasitian talking to him) font anyway. I took like a minute trying to find a similar font to HE and LS's (which is why they share a font )

[addman]

*Watches as Shaon get's maulled by the Nit Picker*

Alas, poor Shaon, I knew her....somewhat.