Addman vs KC11

[KC11]

KC roared as the rounds hit her stomace. Darned creature could figure out the one unscaled part of her. The rounds went right through her stomace, causing her to feel a little woozy. She knew what was coming next, and how she could use it to her advantage.

"YOU'LL PAY FOR THAT!" she yelled at addman.

She flew back over and spewed at the spot where addman was. Bones of dead animals and green slime went everywhere.

She then flew away until she was by a forest, sat down, and began to try and get some of the rounds out of her the best she could.

[addman]

((Apologies, I forgot to mention that the rounds were in fact Plasma rounds. I mentioned in the post before that I'd switched back to the plasma cartridge, but assumed you'd remember in my last post. Still, we can continue without much fuss))

Pleased that he'd finally made a hit that counted, Addman didn't have much time to revel in it as that dragon then began to vomit all around the immediate area. A large green glob fell directly in front of him, making him jump back and avoid another one which would have hit him otherwise.

He placed his arms over his head and ran as large bones and slime began to rain down around him. In his haste to find cover, he dived into a hollow log nearby, scrambling inside and coming to a halt in the middle of it. He could still hear the splashin and gurgling around him as he lay in what he hoped would be a safe hiding place ((I don't know if your vomit is corrosive, so I'll leave it to you to decide if it can dissolve wooden bark or not)).

[KC11]

KC11 finished picking out the rounds and went back to watch as the vomit began eating away at a tree stump. Pity that addman moved. She could have just finished the fight right then.

She was suddenly feeling very tired. Tranforming into a flea had not been good for her energy, even if she had slept in the form. No use beating around the bush, she had to get a quick rest.

She sniffed around until she found the hollow log where addman was. She was just raising her foot with a mind to crush the log when she had a better idea. She breathed lightning on the two holes on either side of the log. The shrubury near the logs caught fire, and she flew away as the fire began to spread to the log. She landed several yards away and went to sleep.

[Swix]

And the Scores are here:

Addman:

Believability: 10/10. Selfishly destructive, wouldn’t expect anything less

Powerplay: 0/-10. No problems here

Personality/Flair: 10/10. I have to admit, I enjoyed reading your style immensely. Always able to add a little bit of humour to the situation.

Cleverness/Inventiveness: 19/20. You used the arenas area well when attempting to conceal yourself, but running directly beneath a huge hovering dragon and firing gives you top marks.

Grammar/Spelling: 9/10. A few minor mistakes, but that’s about it.

Total Score: 48/50

KC11:

Believability: 8/10. As far as your character goes, she was pretty believable. However the constant going from tired to energised very quickly is something that may require a little work.

Powerplay: -7/-10. The majority of your posts were fine, but the very last post you made loses you major marks. Not only did you not give him a chance to react to your sniffing around or raising your foot, which would have left a small window of opportunity for your opponent and so should have resulted in it stopping, you then breathed ligntning on both sides and trapped him there with no way out.

Personality/Flair: 8/10. I am still pretty unfamiliar with your particular style of writing, however I can see an emerging individuality within it.

Cleverness/Inventiveness: 17/20. I would have liked to see you use more of your morphing ability. Surely a shapeshifter could easily have used an arena like the one you were given to much greater effect? However, using the vomit caused by your injury as a form of attack was very clever of you

Grammar/Spelling: 8/10. Not bad at all, but still quite a few minor spelling mistakes. Also longer, more descriptive sentences would help.

Total Score 34/50.


Addman is the winner today. KC11, you are still developing your skills and did quite well against such an experienced opponent, but I'm afraid if it weren't for that last post of yours you would have scored higher. Keep in mind that RPing is not just about winning, and that a simple split in your aforementioned post would have done you good.

As usual, if there is a problem with these scores for whatever reason please outline them.